Today, I’m starting the process of writing the second draft of The Crossing, thanks to the great advice I received from Katie Clark and author, Leslie E Heath. So far, I’ve taken out a load of instances of passive voice which slows the pace of the story.
Additionally, I have found 128 uses of the word ‘seem’. It ‘seems’ like everything ‘seems’ to happen on the story rather than anything actually happening.
I’ve just done all the begin, become and every variation of them. Oh my God, so much began to happen in the story!
Now I have to look at the filter words : felt, saw, heard, wondered, thought. I have to put people inside Paul’s head so we see things through his eyes, rather than seeing him seeing things.